11-11-2008, 11:57 AM | #1 |
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After dissecting them and each issue is resolved involving these invitations, I ship the draft along to the next group of unsuspecting guinea pigs lol
I have been working on these for about a week now... I get lost in the spelling, and after a while the words don't make much sense anymore, so I have to walk away and recruit fresh eyes. Any opinions on a better word for "image" here? Or any other suggestions? The section I am currently driving myself nuts with in bold; (I changed some of the important details for safety purposes, not to mention the guest list is strictly 50!) The honor of your presence is requested.
Me and Him celebrate the beginning of our new life together as we are joined as husband and wife. The harmony of love meets with the melody of life joining the reverie of captivating images and compositions of the tranquil sea Sunday, the first of March Two thousand and nine at seven o'clock in the evening via The Big Fancy Aquarium. Cocktails, intimate seated dining and merriment will follow. A once in a lifetime opportunity to admire our charming aquarium prior to the ceremony -free of charge- is encouraged. If so desired, please instead arrive a quarter to six. We ask all of our guests to please report to the staff entrance upon arrival. |
11-11-2008, 04:19 PM | #2 |
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It is beautiful. I love the "The harmony of love meets with the melody
of life." "joining the reverie of captivating images and compositions of the tranquil sea" is also beautiful, but doesn't relate to getting married like the beginning does. But, if you keep it the way it is, it is very lovely.
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11-12-2008, 07:30 AM | #3 |
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I think it's very nice too. You're good at this pope.
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11-12-2008, 04:18 PM | #4 |
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One suggestion. Around here, the formal invitation would not include the details you are showing about the reception and the arrival details and suggestions. The invitation would give the basic information with any frills you may wish to use. There would be a second sheet with directions, details and suggestions with regard to the aquariam. The invitation itself would read something like this:
Me and Him request the honor of your presence in celebrating the beginning of our new life together as we are joined as husband and wife. The harmony of love meets with the melody of life joining the reverie of captivating images and compositions of the tranquil sea Sunday, the first of March Two thousand and nine at seven o'clock in the evening via The Big Fancy Aquarium. Cocktails, intimate seated dining and merriment will follow. The other information would be on the other coordinating card that would be enclosed behind the invitation. The beauty of this is that it is your wedding and you can do it any way you want!! These are just suggestions as you requested. Wishing you the very, very best!!!
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